Tuesday, August 18, 2009

I had this fascinating idea of writing a world where comment bubbles exist in common day, but I am terrible at dialogue & have no confidence to post my failure. Here is a taste of unedited freshness:

"Can I buy you a drink?" I asked the woman in the cliche red silk dress, leaning myself against the crowded bar.
"I'm not here to flirt," she looked back at her friends chatting frantically then looked back at me eyes full with contempt. "I have a boyfriend." She turned her back, but I could still see her streaked hair crossing atop her breasts creating a most tempting shadow. My comment bubble came with out effort, bold and unexpected in my own italic font, Well I have a goldfish. Out of the corner of her eye, she spotted me."Excuse me?"
"Oh, I'm sorry," I began. "I thought we were talking about shit that didn't matter.

In this world, you could send comment bubbles through texts as well.


He made himself a whiskey sour, it's bitter taste suiting his mood. Sitting himself on the familiar worn leather padding of his couch he stretched for the TV remote but could not reach. Exhausted, he snatched the stereo remote and pressed play pointing off in the distance. It did not work. Taking a gulp from his drink, he simultaneously bashed the remote against the wall then pressed play point in the same place. It worked, but the music had an unsettling tune in comparison to his mood. He tried to make the remote work again, but failed. Adjusting to the music he pondered his day with a scratch in his head from the curiosity of what band was playing. Curiosity getting to the better of him, he rose with a stretch followed by a shiver from the surprise of his cellphone vibrating so close to his balls. It was a text from Hailey. Thought bubbles crowded his flat, Do I have to spell out my detest for this woman? I don't see how I can provide more obvious hints. And who the fuck names their daughter Hailey? She wouldn't be so bad if she didn't live up to every bimbo stereotype she has at her disposal. He contemplated opening her text, thought bubbles disapparating into thin air.I'm too fucking nice. With a simple tap came a large comment bubble. hay! jsyk just cuz you + liberty rnt together anymore dun mean we cant still be friends! hopefully ill c u l8ter, i miz ur face lol ;P
Timothy Larks hands cringed as the pink font faded, then wondered why he deserved this as the comment bubble disappeared. He was a nice guy, just beaten down by work and women. He tried to think of something to say, to think, anything to feel the relief that you feel when you let it all out, the satisfaction of your handrwiting being sprawled effortlessly in the air. Deciding to ignore Hailey's text, he began to walk to his stereo. Unfortunately, Timothy Larks was interupted by a rainbow butterfly fluttering suddenly from his phone. No. He thought, No. His mind buzzing frantically, he texted: OH MY GOD IF YOU SEND ME ONE MORE ABBREVIATED TEXT THE ONLY THING YOULL SEE IS MY FIST IN YOUR FACE. When Hailey recieved his message, it appeared strongly in a plain bubble. Hailey's smile faded as her friends resisted laughter. Of course there were the select few wanted to press charges immediantly.
Tim finished his now delicious drink with a geniune smile on his face as Muse blasted from his stereo.
This band's not half bad.

I just wrote these. No rewrite. I'll see how I feel about it later, I guess.

Also, I've been working on a comic book in a completely different drawing/writing style. It's more challenging than I thought it would be, I may potentially scan some pages.

My sister's birthday is coming up. I've decided when my sister leavies for college, I'm going to make her a gift basket with all the essentials. You know- Ramen, a 12 pack of PBR, some leftover Plan B pills and a laminated business card for a good lawyer. Damn I’m a good big sister.



2 comments:

  1. What a fine idea! I think you've told me this concept of visible thought bubbles before. Your story is very well written :) I like the part about the butterfly.

    I'm curious about that comic book too. You should scan those soon!

    Hey, what happened to that title screen you drew for me? You said it was "ruined" but I'm sure we could work around that :) I want to see it!

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  2. yeah, I think I made a facebook post of it or something... I'm curious about the comic book, too! I'm having trouble with what I want my characters to look like. >_<

    I did draw a few, but they were in my sketchbook, which I lost. I'm actually exceptionally pissed off about this. If you still need a title screen I'd be glad to re-draw it though. ^-^

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